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Title by Metallica. :music:

photography class assignment.
probably will scrap.

one of my first photo manips.
I didn't do much...at all, but hey, it's a start.

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Critiques


:iconalienation:
Oh, very well done!

I like the high-definition feel of your images, which always gives such a crisp, sharp clarity to everything. It's different and it's so you. It has a lot of personality.

But...

The horse "reflection" disturbs me a bit. Many reasons: it feels too clear, too sharp (heh =D) in this context. Almost as if the eye was a mirror, but not quite. I'd lower the opacity further; it might be less visible, but it'll feel more natural.

The angle and size of it also bothers me a bit. Perhaps if it was a broader range (smaller horse, more background) it'd feel more natural - as it is, it feels too close for something reflected in a horse's eye. To me, anyway. The angle also looks a bit awkward to me - methinks rotating the image and resizing might help.

And what really distracts me the most... the bottom of the reflection, near the hooves, seems a bit too clear cut - where the image ends and the eye begins is pretty obvious. That's the first thing I'd correct. I'm assuming you use photoshop - play with layer transparency, so it blends better.

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:iconchihirohakueverafter:
oh my gosh! that is so amazing! I love it!!!!

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amazing .. soo beautiful

so touchy ...

so beauty deep eye

i love it so much :heart:

it's really give me inspiration

u r soo Innovative :aww:

i'll always support ur Innovative art n_n

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:iconamberghosh:
I personally think this is pretty damn good.
There is an overall tone of sadness, to me.
I feel very sorry for this horse, and making the audience feel something is much more captivating than flashiness or uber-technique.

Good stuff.

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this is GREAT. no time for a full critique but if i could offer anything for next time i'd suggest using a darker horse for the inner eye. not necessarily a silhouette - i just think that it would add another level of realism to the pupil; the shape is PERFECT in my opinion with the arched neck and circular collection, as is the angle you placed it at.

lovelovelove :aww:

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Awe it's so pretty! I love how it has the reflection of the other horse in the eye! Very niffty,
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Hmm sorry if my english is not very good but... well :)
The image added in the eye (too opaque) does not make very realistic. You should have reduced the opaqueness of this one.

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:iconpicturize:
thank you, I will change that.

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:iconpicturize:
thankyou jaye. :hug: :heart:
I agree, he has gorgeous eyes, but they aren't quite dark enough to get a realistic look.

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Jan 1, 2008, 2:22:03 AM

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